Comments on: The Journey off the Path http://coyotemercury.com/2009/02/26/the-journey-off-the-path/ Sun, 05 Feb 2012 14:58:01 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: James http://coyotemercury.com/2009/02/26/the-journey-off-the-path/#comment-1857 James Sat, 28 Feb 2009 15:47:20 +0000 http://coyotemercury.com/?p=2124#comment-1857 Thanks, everyone. This was a fun one to do. Thanks, everyone. This was a fun one to do.

]]> By: Sam http://coyotemercury.com/2009/02/26/the-journey-off-the-path/#comment-1856 Sam Sat, 28 Feb 2009 05:52:10 +0000 http://coyotemercury.com/?p=2124#comment-1856 “only when you’ve strayed / you find your truest way.” — I love these lines. Beautiful poem. :)

]]> By: Sweet Talking Guy.. http://coyotemercury.com/2009/02/26/the-journey-off-the-path/#comment-1855 Sweet Talking Guy.. Sat, 28 Feb 2009 00:24:44 +0000 http://coyotemercury.com/?p=2124#comment-1855 I see what you mean about the sonnet like rhyme, I felt a strong poetic voice kicking in, almost a different language, not timeless but Shakespearian, perhaps. I see what you mean about the sonnet like rhyme, I felt a strong poetic voice kicking in, almost a different language, not timeless but Shakespearian, perhaps.

]]> By: Nicole Nicholson http://coyotemercury.com/2009/02/26/the-journey-off-the-path/#comment-1854 Nicole Nicholson Fri, 27 Feb 2009 15:39:58 +0000 http://coyotemercury.com/?p=2124#comment-1854 Ooooh! Nice twist at the end, and very visual. Ooooh! Nice twist at the end, and very visual.

]]> By: christine http://coyotemercury.com/2009/02/26/the-journey-off-the-path/#comment-1853 christine Fri, 27 Feb 2009 02:28:53 +0000 http://coyotemercury.com/?p=2124#comment-1853 I love how the woman was lying to trap the speaker. It adds a layer of mystery to the poem that made me go back to read it again. I love the crunch of the bones with each step. Great work, James. And your lines about the vulture have inspired more than one poem. It's fun reading these. I love how the woman was lying to trap the speaker. It adds a layer of mystery to the poem that made me go back to read it again. I love the crunch of the bones with each step. Great work, James. And your lines about the vulture have inspired more than one poem. It’s fun reading these.

]]> By: Deb http://coyotemercury.com/2009/02/26/the-journey-off-the-path/#comment-1852 Deb Fri, 27 Feb 2009 00:56:50 +0000 http://coyotemercury.com/?p=2124#comment-1852 The rhyming works, and the refrain *does* seem to ask for it. Nice!

There’s lots to enjoy, including the great lines about “Liars, poets and pranksters all espouse / fair warnings they know you’ll never heed.” Sets me in the mood for a tale and, with the spooky scene, I never know I am in for it or not, until I get to the great turn, right at the end.

(Thanks for the link, too! :-) )

]]> By: angie http://coyotemercury.com/2009/02/26/the-journey-off-the-path/#comment-1851 angie Fri, 27 Feb 2009 00:44:42 +0000 http://coyotemercury.com/?p=2124#comment-1851 wow! It reminds me of that old show--"scared straight." Seriously, though...I love the whole message, the darkest-before-the-storm thing. And nice rhyming, too. Subtle. Sweet! wow! It reminds me of that old show–”scared straight.”

Seriously, though…I love the whole message, the darkest-before-the-storm thing.
And nice rhyming, too. Subtle. Sweet!

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