Comments on: Perhaps They Don’t Really Believe It Either

By: wayne

wayne — Sun, 14 Jun 2009 01:38:08 +0000

nicely written….”radio sun” i really like

By: James

James — Fri, 12 Jun 2009 01:40:05 +0000

Thank you all for your comments. The process was the exciting part of this for me. I might have to try something like this again.

By: Nicole Nicholson

Nicole Nicholson — Mon, 08 Jun 2009 19:58:50 +0000

I like how you showed us your first drafts, and then what developed into your final poem, which is a nice juxtaposition of light and dark, belief and disbelief (“or so they tell us”). Good job.

By: Paul Oakley

Paul Oakley — Sat, 06 Jun 2009 05:47:52 +0000

I love the way you changed “we hear music and try to sing” to “we imagine music and try to sing.” One word can make a world of difference sometimes. You sure made the right choice! Wonderful poem.

By: andy sewina.

andy sewina. — Fri, 05 Jun 2009 20:37:39 +0000

Yeah, Nicely! And I love the way you show your ‘working out’.

By: Nathan

Nathan — Fri, 05 Jun 2009 19:47:34 +0000

I love how the last line recasts the whole piece. And adding such detailed notes is a great idea.

By: Julie Jordan Scott

Julie Jordan Scott — Fri, 05 Jun 2009 15:44:24 +0000

I especially enjoyed reading through your process… thanks for taking us there… and this word combination… flickering whispers…whispers flicker… love the sounds of those two words in tandem…

By: gautami tripathy

gautami tripathy — Fri, 05 Jun 2009 13:48:33 +0000

Liked how it came about.. strings cross with wires

By: Phil Thrift

Phil Thrift — Thu, 04 Jun 2009 20:31:54 +0000

Interesting trek into an unfamiliar region of space, where there are things like black holes, quasars, …

By: Annamari

Annamari — Thu, 04 Jun 2009 20:31:22 +0000

The radio sun is what I like the most, but I enjyed the poem as a whole – And the fact that you considered the requirements so close makes me appreciate it even much more.